Muriwai's Writing Learning Story

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Muriwai's Writing Learning Story
In my writing, I tried to hook my reader by using interesting words
and I tried to make the reader feel like they are there in the
moment in time by using present tense and using my hook. 
As I’m in the line of boys I look around and see everyone else
dancing but me. I hear the music that comes from the drums and
the laptop, it makes me feel relaxed, tired and calm. I also feel like
I can’t dance because if I get the dance moves wrong then I feel
like people are just looking at me because I would not look the
same as other people in my polyfest group. I hear the teachers
telling me to dance but I don’t feel like dancing, I just want to
listen to music. I am sweating because of how hot it is in this
library. I hear the voices of everyone singing the song and the
happy shouts from the teachers and other people watching. I feel
like I have to dance alone and practice before I can even dance in
polyfest practice.
Reflection
I was good at using present tense to hook my reader in by
interesting words and describing everything around me like what I
see, feel, smell and what I am thinking.
My next steps are to write more so the reader gets a better picture
in their head about my moment in time and I need to write a better
hook so it will hook them into my moment in time.

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